Minor text bits, I've tried not to mention what may be on the writer's style
Playing as Max, Week 5, Thursday, Dominic says "Wait...Max, studying? Wait, maybe I walked into Anne's room on accident..."
That 'on' feels like it might be 'by' (room by accident)
Same scenario, after one of the choices, Dominic says, "Anne, don't bother with this Slacker. Let him sink on his own."
The 'S' in Slacker is capitalized. Of course, if Dominic is making it into a title for Max, certainly makes sense.
As Max, Week 5, Friday, Dominic shower scene. Max says: "All right, all right, keep you shirt on...oh I guess you don't have..."
I believe the 'you' before shirt should be 'your'.
(I am assuming the 'all right' versus 'alright' is to emphasize Max slowly saying 'All right.')
Re: Roommates BETA! 0.9.0 (18.02.2014)
Posted: Tue Feb 18, 2014 9:25 pm
by MrEnvy8
I don't know why it is, but aside from homonyms I tend to capitalize nouns. One of my friends thinks it's because I capitalize like a German. I do have a decent grasp of Deutsch Grammatik... even though I can barely speak it.
Anyway, I'll fix that jazz when I get home tonight and edit this post about it.
Re: Roommates BETA! 0.9.0 (18.02.2014)
Posted: Tue Feb 18, 2014 9:40 pm
by Miakoda
Well, if you decide to keep it capitalized, I see no reason why not...it could be a title (after all, Max makes enough names for Dominic ).
Anyways, obviously ignore the next if it doesn't fit your style
Couple more things:
Week 8, Monday playing as Max. If you take Anne, there is one line where Max says: "I'm screwing with you Anne, breath."
I think it should be 'breathe' instead of 'breath'.
Week 8, Monday playing as Max, if you invite Sally: One line, Sally says, "Such a gentleman. But it's fine I'll make my own way. Thanks for inviting me, Max."
I think there should be a comma after 'fine' (conjuctive phrase).
Also, Max's next line on the same day: "Thank for coming Sally!"
I think it should be 'Thanks'.
Week 10, Tuesday, stalking Isabella with Max, there is a Sally line where she says, "hehe. Sorry, I guess."
Maybe the first H should be capitalized in the laugh.
Re: Roommates BETA! 0.9.0 (18.02.2014)
Posted: Wed Feb 19, 2014 12:38 am
by Miakoda
During Valentine's Day, playing as Max, if you go to give Dominic lingerie, directly after Max says "They had this...and I thought it would look good on you." in the upper left hand corner, in red letters, the words 'Image i_dominc angry not found'.
I think the command line is probably looking for i_dominic (the above is missing an i).
Re: Roommates BETA! 0.9.0 (18.02.2014)
Posted: Wed Feb 19, 2014 1:14 am
by mainland
jack1974 wrote:Anne requires also 80 relationship, giving her the perfect Valentine gift and 500 grades. She's not easy to get
Strange, I met all the requirements (and plus) and still didn't get the spring break romance cg...
Re: Roommates BETA! 0.9.0 (18.02.2014)
Posted: Wed Feb 19, 2014 1:32 am
by Miakoda
I don't think this is a bug, but I just want to be sure.
If one plays on Max, and chooses Roxanne over Anne, when Week 14, Saturday rolls around, Anne asks, "So why did you choose Roxanne?"
Is there supposed to be a dialogue option, allowing you to explain to Anne why you chose Roxanne? If there is supposed to be an option, one doesn't appear. The scene continues with "I can't believe this has been tearing her up like this for all this time..." and then goes to "Finally with all the people out of the way, it's time to for Roxanne and I to get down to business."
There is one minor typo during this event: You may wish to remove the 'to' from the part of the sentences 'it's time to for Roxanne and I' (the other 2 'to's after it are fine).
There is another typo Week 15, Tuesday with Sally's protest. There is a line where Max says: "All right, Saly, you've got me. I'm your man..."
Saly should be Sally
I don't think the following is a bug, but I'm not sure.
Finally during the time of Spring Break, when Dominic comes into the room with Max and Rakesh, Dominic gets in his shorts around the dialogue "All right, let's call it a night gents..." Dominic is in shorts (which is fine), but his backside is to the screen, while Max and Rakesh are still facing forward.
Finally, what is the final text 'good ending' (if any) look like with Sally?
Spoiler:
I had 415 Active, 238 Spontaneous, and both essentially went their separate ways, though stay in touch. If this is meant to happen, cool.
Re: Roommates BETA! 0.9.0 (18.02.2014)
Posted: Wed Feb 19, 2014 3:32 am
by Oniyuri
Version 0.9.0
Typos, etc.
Spoiler:
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 7692: It reads "Dominic returns his attention to me, searching for the spot it hurts." - maybe to "the spot that hurts"?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 7765: Dominic says "Oh yeah, this is kind of a crazy one isn't it?" - comma before "isn't"?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 7501: Sally says "SHhhH! Hush!" - should the last "H" be uppercase?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 7503: It reads "Sally is whisper yelling at me." - "whisper-yelling" instead?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 7504: Anne says "Well, just let me know if you need anything, best of luck." - "best of luck" as a separate sentence?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 8095: Prof. Tasque says "You both know I've been helping out Sociology department lately, right?" - missing "the" before "Sociology department".
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 9128: It's a quote, but there is a single quote/apostrophe at the start (next to the double quote).
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 8159: Prof. Tasque says "Thank you Anne, that will... wait, Yes?" - shouldn't the "Yes" be in quotes?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 8162: Anne says "proper answers to check you work against" - "you" to "your".
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 8164: Prof. Tasque says "Hmm.. I suppose that's one" - ellipsis is missing a dot.
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 8513: It reads "Of course he never really get serious about it." - comma after "Of course"?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 8543: "It reads with everyone's class schedules" - singular form for "schedules"?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 8579: "It reads "It's just too big a risk I'll be late for now." - is something missing?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 8903: Sally says "Oh it's no big deal." - comma before "Oh"?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 8919: Sally says "Anne, this is Mephis" - "Mephis" to "Memphis".
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 9138: It reads "He points to the sort of fuzzy suit." - "the" to "a"?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 9323: Rakesh says "Ah,yes, you'll take my picture in it." - missing a space after the comma.
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 9330: Anne says "Okay, say 'Cheezy'" - missing a full stop.
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 9367: It reads "No sooner have I opened my mouth then a little sucker dart" - "then" to "than"?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 10146: Anne says "learn all the language but..." - comma before "but"?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 10159: Dominic says "Heh, no I'd say your parents were right." - full stop after "no"?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 10166: Anne says "I'm glad you didn't say because I'm a girl..." - maybe "say that because" or put "because I'm a girl" in quotes?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 9985: It reads "Dominic grins wearily but waves goodbye" - comma before "but"?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 10280: Rakesh says "Yes, it always best to respect" - "it" to "it's".
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 10350: Sally says "barbecue the Turkey" - lowercase "Turkey".
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 10491: It reads "slow down as people start fill up" - "start to fill up".
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 10499: It reads "making plans for the left overs" - "leftovers"?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 10501: Dominic says "If nobody minds we always had a tradition at" - comma after "minds"?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 11325: Anne says "anything too messy for carryon" - "carry-on" instead?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 11685: Rakesh says "It is a long story, the very short version is" - split it into two sentences?
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 11737: Anne says "ever been good at is Badminton" - lowercase "Badminton"
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 258: It reads "The prisoners dilemma?!" - to "prisoner's"?
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 642: It reads "Lot's of slapstick and the such." - "Lot's" to "Lots" and remove "the".
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 772: It reads "Finally, she gestures for Butch and I to sit down." - to "Butch and me"
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 1681: It reads "On second thought ... no." - remove space before ellipsis?
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 1658: It reads "Art supplies ... so creative of me!" - remove space before ellipsis?
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 1652: It reads "Umm...maybe I'll just offend them." - space after ellipsis?
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 1601: Roxanne says "all of the professors classes" - to "professor's"
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 1877: Rakesh says "Ah HA so you admit it is a weapon then!" - maybe a comma or exclamation mark after "Ah HA"?
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 1976: It reads "really pick sides in this agreement" - "argument" maybe?
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 2383: It reads "I, on the other hand go back to watching TV" - comma after "hand"?
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 2485: Anne says "Thanks max, I appreciate it." - capitalise "max".
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 3646: Sally says "put a picture up on that or something. huh." - question mark or capitalise "huh" or something else?
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 3647: It reads "Sally absent mindedly puts the easel" - to "absentmindedly"?
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 3665: It reads "at the picture with a bb-gun" - to "BB gun"?
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 3640: It reads "put his sketchpad up on it on before he" - remove the second "on".
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 3611: Sallys says "Oh I've heard of this game!" - comma after "Oh"?
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 3411: Isabella says "But it's the thought the counts." - "the" to "that".
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 3412: Isabella says "She takes the pot politiely, looking at it briefly before discarding it almost forgetfully on her desk." - "politiely" to "politely" and "on her desk", but they are in the kitchen?
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 3719: Sally says "I don't mean to disparrage the gift" - "disparrage" to "disparage".
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 3720: Anne says "oh... it's okay." - capitalise "oh".
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 3466: It reads "he really does seem to be tongue tied" - to "tongue-tied"?
Potential spaces before dashes:
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 7446: It reads "I can't help myself- I have to go knock"
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 9300: It reads "and I have to admit- it is a relly cute mascot"
game/scenes1_edit.rpy 10199: Sally says "Hey, Anne, Max- One of you"
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 2580: Max says "So I gotta ask- have you"
Activity description:
Record Store: "lose myself in 'Vakula the Smith', you know?." - remove the full stop.
Other stuff (sprites, etc.):
Spoiler:
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 2933: More intimate scene, so Anne's sprite is mostly covered by Rakesh's - maybe switch them around?
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 3514: Anne and Dominic's sprites are covered with a close-up of Anne's sprite.
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 3639: An error message "Image 'i_Rakesh happy' not found." appears.
game/scenes2_edit.rpy 3327: Anne and Sally's sprites are covered with a close-up of Anne's sprite.
I had some great fun going through the Valentine's gift choices and giving it to the "wrong" person - some of those reactions were classic!
Re: Roommates BETA! 0.9.0 (18.02.2014)
Posted: Wed Feb 19, 2014 4:49 am
by Miakoda
mainland wrote:
jack1974 wrote:Anne requires also 80 relationship, giving her the perfect Valentine gift and 500 grades. She's not easy to get
Strange, I met all the requirements (and plus) and still didn't get the spring break romance cg...
I'm in the same boat as mainland.
For Max and Anne's path:
I managed to get 500 grades before Valentine's day.
On spring break, the Grades are 712, Organized 293, Rational 170 and 85 Relationship.
Re: Roommates BETA! 0.9.0 (18.02.2014)
Posted: Wed Feb 19, 2014 7:22 am
by jack1974
Miakoda wrote:
I think the command line is probably looking for i_dominic (the above is missing an i).
I just did a search in the whole project for "dominc" and found 3 I've now replaced it everywhere with the right name
Miakoda wrote:Is there supposed to be a dialogue option, allowing you to explain to Anne why you chose Roxanne? If there is supposed to be an option, one doesn't appear. The scene continues with "I can't believe this has been tearing her up like this for all this time..." and then goes to "Finally with all the people out of the way, it's time to for Roxanne and I to get down to business."
Good catch! indeed there is, but the indentation was wrong (on python is important to decide which "block" of code is ran) so the choice would happen only if you played as Anne! I've fixed it now, if you have a savegame you can try that on next update
Miakoda wrote:
Finally, what is the final text 'good ending' (if any) look like with Sally?
Spoiler:
I had 415 Active, 238 Spontaneous, and both essentially went their separate ways, though stay in touch. If this is meant to happen, cool.
Yes in both endings they split up
Oniyuri: thanks again, will check the problems.
Regarding Dominic cg bug, do you have a savegame just before the Spring Break so I can try here? People unlocked the romance in previous versions, so unless is a new bug that has been added, I don't know why is not working!
if domoverhears>=4 and Relationship["Dominic"]>=80 and EnoughStats("Rational","Organized"):#added STATS requirements too!
so relationship, stats (the values shown in game) and the domoverhears variable which changes picking the right choice in several events, as described in the Dominic walkthrough (see first post of this thread).
Maybe you didn't do all those steps? Week12 tuesday, Winter Break, Valentine - there's a specific series of steps to raise that variable (as I said is probably one of the hardest romance, but if you follow the walkthrough should work).
Re: Roommates BETA! 0.9.0 (18.02.2014)
Posted: Wed Feb 19, 2014 7:43 pm
by mainland
Miakoda wrote:
mainland wrote:
jack1974 wrote:Anne requires also 80 relationship, giving her the perfect Valentine gift and 500 grades. She's not easy to get
Strange, I met all the requirements (and plus) and still didn't get the spring break romance cg...
I'm in the same boat as mainland.
For Max and Anne's path:
I managed to get 500 grades before Valentine's day.
On spring break, the Grades are 712, Organized 293, Rational 170 and 85 Relationship.
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