Vaelis, act 1, chapter 2
What on earth happened?
Already done this one - the planet is called Aravorn. And remember to capitalize it
Searching the goblin camp
A hole on the ground (button)
A hole in the ground, thank you.
Vaelis, after visiting Shagala in chapter 2
Alright, then until later.
Minor. Just move the comma one word to the right.
Main twin, talking to the cub
I doubt skunks would try to enter a shack if it smells of wolf.
Minor. If you want would, replace smells with smelled. If you want to keep smells, you need to replace would with will. Tense thingy stuff.
Dingirran slave introducing the twins to the market
Twin: Wait - did you just say "everyBODY" here? Slave: Certainy I have!
Certainly I did.
Right after that
Twin: We don't buy people. Slave: Not?!
Perhaps it's a Dingirran thing and thereby intentional. Else, it should be no and not not.
Vaelis, trying to get the twins to help him capture a bear
Just right for polar bears to hibernate.
Hibernate in.
