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Catching some more stuff while playing through act one. Though I don't always remember to not fast forward through everything

Vaelis, act 1, chapter 2
What on earth happened?
Already done this one - the planet is called Aravorn. And remember to capitalize it

Searching the goblin camp
A hole on the ground (button)
A hole in the ground, thank you.

Vaelis, after visiting Shagala in chapter 2
Alright, then until later.
Minor. Just move the comma one word to the right.

Main twin, talking to the cub
I doubt skunks would try to enter a shack if it smells of wolf.
Minor. If you want would, replace smells with smelled. If you want to keep smells, you need to replace would with will. Tense thingy stuff.

Dingirran slave introducing the twins to the market
Twin: Wait - did you just say "everyBODY" here? Slave: Certainy I have!
Certainly I did.

Right after that
Twin: We don't buy people. Slave: Not?!
Perhaps it's a Dingirran thing and thereby intentional. Else, it should be no and not not.

Vaelis, trying to get the twins to help him capture a bear
Just right for polar bears to hibernate.
Hibernate in.

Thanks, not sure about the what on earth thing. Seems weird to me to say "what on Aravorn happened?"

True. You could say "What in the world happened?"

Or you could say that Aravorn is the elven word for Earth and get away with keeping it. You'd still have to capitalize it though. Earth is a name in this case.

I think will replace it with world for now

In that case, "what IN the world..."

yayswords wrote:Dingirran slave introducing the twins to the market
Twin: Wait - did you just say "everyBODY" here? Slave: Certainy I have!
Certainly I did.

Wouldn't this be "I certainly did"?

Yeah, probably. I guess I was happy enough to get the right verb in

More minor typos:
In Act 1, during the quest for missing pelts, just before the choice of following the tracks deeper into woods or returning to town:
Guard Captain Daronas: "Here, Shea. Is only 20 gold coins..." Should be "It's only 20 gold coins..." I believe.

In Krimm's quest, after Atli has asked Krimm's opinion on certain someone's motives:
Atli Grey-Sword: "A splendid idea, daughter! ............ - and them ambush them and spill their blood!" Should be then


In Chalassa's quest, on the dungeon map, the text above the red arrow says:
"There's a guard here. I need to decide if to sneak past or kill him."
Grammar there seems a tad odd to me. Maybe someone else knows better, but I'd use either
"I need to decide whether to sneak past or kill him."
or
"I need to choose between sneaking past or killing him."

"between sneaking past and killing him", in that case. But I think your first suggestion was better anyway.

Right-o! Good that you noticed.