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What if something new appeared in the last few months. <-- should be a question mark

Playing on Nightmare.

Shea's minigame:
Day 1 the town needed to eat 2 food. I started with 2 food, hunters gathered 6 so I should've had 8 - 2 = 6. Instead, on Day 2 it shows 4 food and Ninim consumes 4/day. On day 2-3 Ninim is eating 4 food. I think the Day 1 display is wrong, should say they eat four food.
Curious how much luck plays into getting attacked.

Scene after the spirit world:
Vaelis: "Knowing that the safety of Ninim depends on us to do our job well." <-- should be "depends on us doing our job well"
Shea: "Oh. I...hadn't really thought of that."
Vaelis: "Not?" <-- should be "No?" "Not?" doesn't fit Shea's line.

Same scene, little later:
Shea: "You're right. If father thinks the gnolls are planning something, then that can't be bad." <-- I assume "that can't be bad" refers to the previous line where Vaelis talks about scouting the routes earlier than usual, but it's placement seems to suggest the gnolls planning something can't be a bad thing. Normally, the phrase is "that can't be good."

Althea's story:
I second the comments earlier about the spirit world looking an awful lot like the continent of Loren. And the big animals are pretty detailed, but the art style clashes with that of the characters (and beasts from Acts I-IV).

When they wake up in Stag's territory, there's no visual background change. Given Rowinda's lines, the party knows something is different by looking around, but not the reader. The background behind the stag seems like it might be appropriate.

Scene where they talk about the birds and the bees:
Stag: "In any case, spirit-elf." <- not 100% sure on this, but I think when you're trying to get someone's attention, you'd use a question mark.

I don't quite get the fire minigame. I'm guessing I need to burn all the wood in the green square and none in the orange square, but everywhere else in the game you have explanations. Also, the story text before this talked about just five trees and I'm burning way more than five trees. Does it matter how many I burn as long as I stay inside the green box? At any rate, way more fun than fighting three 1000+ HP Ents.

The dialog box title for failing the fire game says "Please Confirm" - maybe it should say something like "Try Again?" or "You failed and set the forest on fire" or "Should've used that lava" or something else?

Stag scene right after the fire game:
Stag: "Not?" <- the "Not?" is strange here, uncommon in American English. I think your writer uses British English though and can't speak to that.

Althea: "And, um, sorry for killing a few of your kin in the last years." <- replace "the last years" with something like "the past few years" (though, how long have they been hunting stags?)