As with the other games, you won't find many other typos/suggestions.



Original:

Susana

There's a lot of work to be done today, and it's already 8:00am.



Suggestion:

I would recommend putting a space between 8:00 and 'am', and capitalize the 'am' (Later dialogues actually have AM as capitalized, and spaced)

...and it's already 8:00 AM.



Original:

Sam holds up his hands in self defense.



Suggestion:

Put a hyphen between 'self' and 'defense' to get 'self-defense'



Original:

Natalie

Oh, I'll guess I'll go then.



Suggestion:

Having two "I'll" is a little awkward. I would recommend changing the first 'I'll' to just 'I' to get:

Oh, I guess I'll go then.



Original:

Natalie

It's fine you, can laugh.



Suggestion:

Move the comma to after 'fine':

It's fine, you can laugh.



Original:

Sam marches into his kitchen with a a hint of a smirk on his face.



Suggestion:

You have two 'a's after 'with'. One can be removed:

Sam marches into his kitchen with a hint of a smirk on his face.



Original:

Steve

Besides, I'll burn if off working outside later today, anyway.



Suggestion:

The 'if' should be 'it':

Besides, I'll burn it off working outside later today, anyway.